The Price #5 (the adieu….)

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…………in continuation of The Price #4 (This part contains major spoilers. To understand the plot and characters properly, you need to read all the previous parts if you haven’t already.)


“It’s a tragic story of one such ill-fated angel, who underestimated the gravity of his duty to his master,” he said but didn’t lift his eyes. “Underestimated the rules.”

“He dared to fall in love with a human girl and told her about his secret,” she said what she had already guessed.

“Yeah,” he said, still not taking his eyes off that sketch with strokes of red. “He didn’t regret it, until his angel wings were ripped out from his back and he was banished to earth. Until the gates of heaven were closed for him for an eternity. He still loved her but it wasn’t enough for someone who was torn apart from his essence.”

“What happened to the girl?” she couldn’t keep herself from asking. She heard the curiosity and concern in her own voice.

“It was part of the punishment,” he said and his eyes appeared to bore holes in that page. “He was commanded to wipe out memories of him from her mind. And he had to do it, for her sake. A fallen angel. That was what he was now. A fallen angel with black feathered wings. Though still not visible to humans, those black feathered wings were a hideous reminder of what he had lost,” his throat bobbed but he hardened his jaw and continued without looking at her. “And he had lost too much, not only his white angel wings. It was the price he had to pay for underestimating the rules. The price for revealing the secrets of his existence.”

He was right, the story was tragic. An uncomfortable silence followed and he just stared at the sketchbook. The air had turned so thick that it would not have been a surprise to be able to slice it with knife. He finally lifted his eyes.

“I hope you’re satisfied with this much information,” he said blankly. The mask was still in its place.

“Was that glamour so powerful?” she said ignoring him in an effort to take their mind off the sad part. “Hiding such big pair of wings must have been hard for angels.”

“Glamour was powerful, yes” he said. “But it had its limits. It could only conceal the wings when they were attached to the angel’s body.”

“You mean if a few feathers were dropped here and there unintentionally, they became visible to humans.”

“Yeah. But angels didn’t bother with it because they knew a human mind would assume they belonged to a bird or something,” he said in a rush. “Look, it was nice talking to you but I have to be somewhere. I really need to go.” he said getting up and started picking up his stuff.

“Will it have a happy ending?” she asked and got up from the chair. Cliff-hanger was one of those things she hated the most. And she didn’t know why but she felt she needed to know the whole story.

“I don’t know,” he said and shrugged, feigning boredom. “I haven’t completed the book yet. And as I said before, it’s fiction. I would advise you not to get so involved in it.”

“Well…..okay,” she said, perceiving his flat tone as a sign that she was not going to get the whole story. “So…um….nice to meet you.” It came out as a question.

He was about to turn around and leave but then stopped. As if he forgot to say something, he faced her again. Something had changed about the way he was looking at her, but she couldn’t put her finger on it. Slowly he took a few steps towards her. So slowly, as if he was fighting an inner war. He closed the distance between them. She opened her mouth to say something but closed it again when he lifted his arm and touched her face gently with his hand.

She forgot to breathe. His palm felt warm against the cold skin of her cheek. Her heart fluttered and then started beating faster.

He looked into her eyes and she saw his pupils dilating. “Yeah, it was nice to meet you,” he said softly. And for the first time since she met him, she saw raw emotion on his face; felt it dripping from those words.



Something cool was touching against her temple and cheek. Opening her eyes, she found herself leaning towards the window and her head was rested on the cold glass pane. She groaned and then sat straighter in the chair.

Great! Falling asleep while reading in a café! What an excellent way to spend my weekend!

She adjusted her hair and prayed that no one noticed her sleeping. Still running her fingers through her hair, she took in her surroundings and found that everyone in the café was busy. No one was looking at her side.

Thank God! No one saw me sleeping like that. It would have been so embarrassing!

Her coffee lying on the table before her was already cold and she had no idea how long she had been asleep. Getting up, she closed the book she was reading. Clockwork Angel by Cassandra Clare, the cover read.

How the hell did I fall asleep in the middle of an interesting book?

She blamed it on the weariness after the hectic week.

And that dream I had just now?

She looked towards the far corner table and found it unoccupied.


So it was really a dream. Though she didn’t remember what the dream was actually about, she could have sworn that everything was happening for real! That she was really talking to some mysterious guy. She again shook her thoughts off. Gathering her stuff, she quickly made her way towards the exit. She had wasted too much of her time today.

Maybe she was in a hurry or still half asleep. Maybe that’s why on her way to the exit, she didn’t give a second glance to the long black feather lying on the floor near the far corner table.


©sakshi~the escapist, 2017

Category: Story series

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  1. Omg it was just like magic man while the end when he touches her face I was really expecting something big and in the end what I got was gigantic. Really masterpiece. I have to write this all in a poetry sometime. I mean story was actually like a dream. God really amazing made my day.

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    1. Thank you SO much, Ashutosh! You were keeping up with this series right from the first part! I am grateful for your patience and support. I am really glad that the final part met your expectations. You’re calling it a masterpiece, it means A LOT to me. And feel free to do the poetry thing.I’ll be waiting. ✌✌😊😇

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      1. You know sakshi some times short story takes us away from reality and it feels really good. to be honest I wanted it to go on for a little while but its genius to know when to stop and you did that pretty good too. So hats off.

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      2. I know Ashutosh! This story could’ve been longer but I was afraid that it might lose it’s charm and mysterious vibe. So I tried to keep it both short and different. And it gives me immense pleasure that you liked it despite the abrupt ending. Thanks again, buddy! 😊

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  2. Amazing…I was like..oh!no why does she have to end it this way…all this is a dream? And then the last para..she didn’t give a second glance to the black feather on the floor. Babe! Wonderful story.. You could have written more. Loved it..keep growing as a writer and make us fall for your writings.

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    1. Thank you honey! *phew* now that you gave me a postive response, I feel actually relaxed. I know you might’ve expected a longer story but I wanted it to remain mysterious till the end. But you still liked it, that means a lot!! Thanks my dear! 😘😘 especially for REALLY getting the last part.

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      1. This one from you is just out of the can I not like it? Lobed the ending..I understand you wanted the story to be mysterious but you write so well. I would love to read a full length Story from you👍

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  3. 😮😢😧😩😱😖 I wanted a happy ending for them! Why? Why oh why!

    Great story by the way. You should really think about writing it further. It was the kind of sweet paranormal romance that you want to curl up with on a rainy day with a cup of hot joe in your hand. Think about it seriously

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    1. Thank you sooooooo much, Pradita. You are so damn good in writing mystery with sprinkles of romance. So this praise coming from you means a lot. I like mystetious stories that leave us hanging with billion questions (in a good way of course). So I wanted to write something similar. But in turn I ended up writing a short length series. 😕 Believe me I want to write longer stories but I am not confident enough.😞 I hope someday I come out of my comfort zone.

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      1. Babe, this blog IS the right place for you to start writing long form. Why are you afraid? Of a lukewarm, or worse still, no response from readers? That will never happen. Someone will always appreciate the work you’re doing. Just like you did mine. My series were never as popular as my other posts but I still wrote… For readers like you… Who actually appreciated and waited for it. You guys gave me hope that people do read long form writings too. So go ahead, develop that story. Don’t be afraid. This is the best platform for you to be creative and get feedback. If you keep that story in your head it’ll always stay there… Get it out!

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    2. Me tooo!!!!!
      That ending just crushed my heart! And shattered it into pieces!! This story has sooooo much potential!!!

      Sakshi Di, you should really consider writing a BIG thing! And don’t be scared of it. Okay? Just think of it as small stories which are part of a big story!!!

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  4. Writing the comment while reading this post!
    I told him, not to tell her the secret, i knew he will fade!!! Why!!!????

    Can she see his fallen feathers??? Oh my god, he is an angel!! And now he is telling her the secret!

    WHAT!!!?????? A DREAM!!!!!!!!!!?????????
    I mean, it was sooooo beautiful, He was just going to say those words, looking in her eyes!!! Man!! Why does it have to be a dream?

    (You played with my emotions Di!!!!)

    But I think I have to accept this ending, because the story was so amazing that the ending can’t ruin it for me!!!

    Amazing job!! Literally!! 😊😊😊

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    1. He had to. 😐 There was no other choice. But hey, look at the bright side, she atleast gave one glance to the feather, even if her memories are wiped again😞
      Okay, sorry for distracting you from the point. And sorry I played with your feelings. My friends outside WordPress call me evil😈 I hope I write something happening and longer soon.😊😊

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      1. Well I would have called you that too, but all the episodes of this beautiful and amazing series overshadowed the ending.
        You know why you used that dream as an ending? Because you were afraid to drag this story, and move it forward, so you put a fullstop there, and what a better fast ending than a ‘dream’. Please don’t get offended by your friend and my comments, because I understand why you did so.
        Just wanna say, if you like something, don’t be afraid about if you won’t be able to do it. And write a great damn series! (though they are tiring as hell, from personal experince, procrastinating is way much easier, but you have to fight!)
        Sorry for this big comment.

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      2. Hahaha…you’re absolutely right. I am one hell of a procrastinator🙁 Don’t be sorry. Very few people are lucky to have amazing and lovely people like I found here on wordpress, people who are honest and supportive, no matter what. So thanks for that.😇😇(Though I still hope you know that it was not actually a dream 😉)

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      3. OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I was so upset at the thought of it being just a dream, that I skipped the last line, how could I?
        I did exactly like her, didn’t glance at the long black feather lying there!!!!
        OH MY GOD, that was sooo cool!!!!

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      4. Hey…wait wait. I am being serious now. Why are you sorry!! Didn’t you read my previous comment about me being lucky to have supportive and honest readers like you??!!! Don’t be sorry dude. You’re like my little brother.😊😊😊😘😘

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      5. I am glad to hear that!!! You write amazing Di and please don’t underestimate yourself! I know every writer has the scope to make progress, but if you won’t write, then you will never reach another step. 🙂
        And you’re like my sweet sis! 🙂

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  5. Aha! The best part about a reading a mystery and having speculations is getting it right! Now, obviously I couldn’t have guessed such an epic end but I figured their past connection (a naïve idea) and when you mentioned black wings and the limitations of glamour the end became clear as daylight! But, oh, I never could have guessed you’ll fit it in as a dream so brilliantly. It was a bliss. So glad to have read it!

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